While I am only a 16-year-old boy, I have certain expectations in life. I imagine one day I will settle down with a family of my own, no matter other's thoughts on this matter. I hope to find love and possibly marry the woman of my dreams. I have dreams and aspirations that need to be fulfilled and I want a wife that will nurture and respect these goals. Without a partner, life is lonely and empty. But what if my wife isn't good enough? What if she can't support me if I lose my job? Or what if I suddenly want to change my career? I would have to go back to school and I would require someone to support me and my family financially. Come to think of it, my concerns for life would all be solved with a husband.
With a husband, I wouldn’t need to work. My family could be supported without me even stepping foot in a job center. If I don’t want to work, why should I have to? My husband is there to support me emotionally and fiscally. He would have to work full-time, making a minimum amount for my need (and luxuries). My husband would do this, without any fighting or negotiation. With the kids now old enough to do their own chores and go to school, it’s only fair that my husband does all the work while I get to stay home and relax. He would make at least a 6-digit salary to support my needs (and wants). If he can’t afford to pay for my car, phone, yoga lessons, magazine subscriptions, and anything else I see at the store, is he really a man? He'll probably have to work a blue collar job. Getting dirty so I don't have to. Why would I have to do it, when my husband can do it for me.
I need a rock in my life. A person who can keep me emotionally stable. Whenever I have a fight with one of my friends, my husband needs to be there when I need a shoulder to cry on, even if he's already worked a 10-hour shift. However, above all else, he should always be trying to make me happier. It's only right for a husband to continuously try to make the world a better place for his partner and family. And whenever we argue about something he should always be wrong and I should always be right. It’s only the natural order of relationships. My husband also needs to be fit. Nobody likes a slacker. If he can’t find time to work for his family and stay healthy, that’s his problem.
If my husband can’t fulfill these requirements then I’ll simply replace him with someone better. A husband is always replaceable and he should never get mad whenever I remind him of that. A husband sounds pretty good. I think everyone should have one. A person whose whole life is revolved around making you happy. With a husband, you’d never ever have to worry about work or a job, or even supporting yourself financially. They’ll always be a man out there ready to pay for my next meal. I would love to have a husband.
I liked reading this. You did a good job capturing the tone of Brady's essay. There's a few things I question though. Why the expectation that the husband would be in a blue collar job? I get the idea of him having to work hard, but if anything I would expect the expectation (weird phrase) to be a white collar job. Also, at the end you say "you’d never ever have to worry about work or a job, or even supporting yourself financially." Which is essentially three ways of saying the same thing. Other than those two things, you did a great job.
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job with a similar sarcastic tone to Judy Brady's essay. I struggled with trying to decide whether I should be sarcastic or truthful in my essay (I decided to try to stick to truthful because I didn't want to be rude or disrespectful but I'm sure that took away from the Judy Brady tone a bit). I think to match her essay more, you could've said "I want a husband who..." a few more times. But overall, this was structured well. You had paragraphs at the right places and your thoughts were all connected.
ReplyDeleteYour very first paragraph made me laugh in class today (had to explain myself for my outbursts). Come to think of it, so did your second one. And your last two. I can hear your voice as I read this. Thanks for brightening my morning Vinny, I always enjoy your blog posts.
You have convinced me.
ReplyDeleteVincent, boyo, you've nailed the tone of the essay perfectly. I got the sarcasm and subtle hatred from it that the original contained, and I enjoyed it a lot. I think the one thing that would have made this nearly identical to Brady's, would be if you had mimicked her constant use of the same sentence opener. Your word choice was very harsh in a subtle way, but intelligent and ego filled just like the original. Beautiful. Also, I enjoyed your thoughts on male stereotypes. Lord knows there are too many fat slob men in the world, so why wouldn't a woman get to pick one or multiple men to suit her needs? That would be a woman's right, am I right?
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your blog, I agree with Josiah that you nailed the tone that Brady presents throughout her essay. I feel you also nailed the exaggeration portion of this assignment.
ReplyDelete"With a husband, I wouldn’t need to work. My family could be supported without me even stepping foot in a job center. If I don’t want to work, why should I have to? My husband is there to support me emotionally and fiscally. He would have to work full-time, making a minimum amount for my need (and luxuries). My husband would do this, without any fighting or negotiation."
Deletehey thats a pretty good blog you got there my dood, nice job copying that tone Brady uses in "I want a wife". i enjoyed this blog almost as much as marts but come on, to achieve that level of writing would take quite a lot of effort.
ReplyDeleteYour blog post utilized both rhetorical elements and styles that made your blog post an effective piece of writing. Your use of parallelism with the phrase, "I want a husband" added repetition that emphasizes what you are trying to get across to your audience, and it resembles Judy Brady's original piece. The language you used was humorous, and I feel the audience can understand what you are trying to get across in your writing. Your tone is very satirical and overall humorous, which makes your post entertaining to your audience. You also made it clear that you should not be taken literally with anything you say in this post. You manage to appeal to the audience's sense of pathos through your humorous tone and content, which I enjoyed greatly. As a whole, your post was well done, and it incorporated the necessary rhetorical elements and styles that ultimately made it entertaining and effective.
ReplyDeleteReading this blog I kept thinking of the Wizard of Oz song "If I Only Had a Brain" but instead "If I Only Had a Husband." I don't know why I mentioned this as it really has nothing to do with the analysis of this essay, but now it's stuck in my head. This blog closely mimics Brady's essay, and while that is good because it's the assignment, I'm having trouble distinguishing your personal voice. I want more of the lines like "I need a rock in my life." It's funny. I read that part in your voice. The last paragraph is how I wish you would have written the entire essay."A husband is always replaceable and he should never get mad whenever I remind him of that." Good. That is good. It is funny. More of that. Also, your sentences are a little short (yes I know my sentences in this comment are short but it is because I am making a point.) There are little tidbits throughout this that I can really dig, because they carry ~your~ voice. More!!! Of!! That!!
ReplyDeleteYour post is great in the sense that you pose an ironic tone with "Why would I have to do it, when my husband can do it for me. [With a period *cough cough*]" It is packed with satire and irony, but low in sarcasm.
ReplyDeleteThe flow of this post almost completely parallels Brady's writing style. You seemed to be rather passionate about what you wrote about which really added to the overall effectiveness of this essay, I could really hear your voice throughout it. You effectively hit every stereotype on the head, and overall it was a very enjoyable read.
ReplyDeleteI especially liked, "A husband is always replaceable and he should never get mad when I remind him of that." That statement alone is so powerful and sassy, I love it.
DeleteSign me up for this kinda husband. This man sounds like a dream, financially stable, emotionally stable. You nearly perfectly mimicked the style and tone of Brady. I hate to repeat myself over and over again, but your use of satire in this writing blends in perfectly with your own original voice. I can just hear your voice reading this outloud to me.
ReplyDeleteYou always have a way of making sure your writing is snarky. "If I don’t want to work, why should I have to?" This SCREAMS Vinny.
Lastly, I really would like it if later on in life you actually had a had a husband. Y'all would be very cute together. Personally, you two both being successful, and doing great cute little gay things together is a wonderful thought. If you don't mind me suggesting, I suggest this website : http://www.allmale.com/ .
It's pretty basic, but seems like a legit website. I hope your love endeavours go well in the future!
Vinnay! Throughout your essay, you incorporate so much pathos. You are able to make blunt commands that will direct your audience to your probable satire. "He would make at least a 6-digit salary to support my needs (and wants)" shows that a lot of your want for a husband is financial support. You use hyperbolic satire to represent that women stereotypically demand a lot from men seeing as, including the need for a high degree in order to make so much money. "If my husband can’t fulfill these requirements then I’ll simply replace him with someone better" reinforces the idea of high demands. You did a good job in enforcing the "burden of man" and how they are basically trapped in the "woman's world."
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, this essay doesn't really mimic Judy Brady's. You don't use the same style wherein she reiterates the phrase 'I want a husband". However, you do start off the essay with an anecdote, as does she. I think that if you would have tried to imitate her style of writing more, then your piece would have followed our prompt better. In general, though, I really enjoyed your response because it had so much voice in it. I laughed so many times and I definitely expected this kind of response from you.
ReplyDeleteThis blog post is probably one of the best ones I've read thus far. I particularly enjoy your use of rhetorical questions, specifically in the opening paragraph; it made me want to continue reading. My favorite example of this is, "If he can’t afford to pay for my car, phone, yoga lessons, magazine subscriptions, and anything else I see at the store, is he really a man?" I also think your writing style did a very good job at mimicking Judy Brady's.
ReplyDeleteI am gonna be honest with you bru I cried. You imitated Brady's style very well. Your language was also very on point and added to a unique style.
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